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I can really appreciate this. it's very good. However, most people probably won't "get" it. You're using a lot of unnecessary words and the sentence structure doesn't "follow the rules" at times. Part of good writing is to eliminate a lot of the unnecessary words and keep it simple. But I'm not here to lecture you. Fuck the rules.
Don't take this the wrong way, I'm just pointing out that lots of people won't get it, though I think it's good.
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