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Old 11.02.2017, 06:49 PM   #1
Shaka Moloch
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A tanka is a Japanese verse form in five lines, the first and third of five syllables and the rest of seven.
I invite anyone and everyone to pull out the dictionary and/or a thesaurus, study or exercise some English to put to work at the Americanized tanka form of poetry here!
What say we have some fun with this challenge?


 



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