Its a good story. Im fiding it interesting and slightly scary.But the grammar isnt all that great. you need to make sure your is are capital letters. even if i did know the i should of been I. Also you need to add but your using , for but it is still a good story, but I dont know why you changed your writing style. It went from script to story. Also avoid the word yh. Plus, why would she give out her details on a radio station? Every child is taught not to do thta. She wasnt even asked
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